Friday, October 9, 2009

Narrative: Final Paper

“It will only be for a couple of days”.said my caseworker. “were just
putting you in an emergency group home until your mother can find stabiltiy”.
So I finally agreed to stay at the Christmas Box House. I was under the impression
That I would only be there for a few days, but three turned to a week and a week into two
And after a month of my mom not improving I went to my first foster home.

“wake up, its time for shool baby.” (I had never thought I would miss hearing those words.) It was a typical Wednesday morning and I wasn’t too thrilled about waking up to go to school for 6 hours. So after about 20 minutes of rough persuasion, I finally woke up and put my clothes on for school.

I was about two weeks into the third gade and I was under the impression I was officially grown up. It was only half way through the day (I was at lunch.) on the way back to the classroom and then I saw my councelor she had been helping me with my behavior in school she said she needed to talk.

I walked to her office not noing that the next few minutes would be a life changing experience. I walked in to find by little bro and sister and my caseworker had a worried look on her face.


-eli-

9 comments:

Anonymous said...

Eli,
Wow! You are a great writer! You have a very strong, relatable voice in your writing. I miss hearing my own mother wake me up in the morning, so this story really hit home for me. The way you wrote this story shows that you have a unique experience to share, even if the momory is an unpleasant one. I am really very impressed at your quality of writing! Keep writing, you have a very special talent for it!

Krysta
CO150-83

Anonymous said...

This is a really good narrative great job.You have put alot of thought into it .And i know how you feel the same thing happened to me and my little sisters.But just keep moving on thats what i have to do everyday.
Ashley

Anonymous said...

eli really good bro. i appreciate how you no what you are you doing. This story is perfect to read.

Aaron said...

I really enjoy the way you wrote your paper. The only thing left in the back of my brain is, finish the story. I really want to know what she said.

kesha said...

Oh my Eli! I could visualize everything you were saying! I felt like I was you, looking threw your eyes. You have really been threw a lot. You are a strong person and you ARE going to be so much when your older if you can just work hard and strive the hardest you can. I didn't even know you had siblings.

-Kesha :)

Anonymous said...

Eli,
This is such a well written paper that grabbed my attention within the first few lines. You do a great job keeping the reader in suspense; I kept wondering what was going to happen next! You build up your story and do not fall short at the end. I think it is safe to say that everyone reading your paper was surprised by the ending by learning about your brother and sister. I do agree with Aaron, though. I am interested in what your counselor had to say next since she looked worried.
Kayla
CO150-89

Austin Fisher said...

Post-
Eli, this intro has fantastic voice! Your use of quotes and how you walked the reader through your thought process was a great tool to connect with the reader. I could relate greatly with the way you showed your emotions in this segment. This speaks well of a relationship you held with your mother and I look forward to reading the rest. You have done a great job of finding your voice and portraying it in your writing. Keep it UP!!!

Austin Fisher
Co150 Sec 89

Eddie said...

Sounds like those were some bad news, everyone has had a rough life, in their own different way.

sena said...

Eli, I'm sorry your mom didn't improve for you. Thank you for being a strong person.